Prism Vultorek

Name: Prism Vultorek

Species: Elf

Age: 21

Gender: Male

Good, Evil, Neutral?: Neutral

Appearance: Here is a picture of his head but I will explain the rest blue jeans and white T-shirt black hoodie

(Pictures are appreciated if you can find or modify one.)

History: Prism was born an elf but raised by humans, at the age of 14 he was told about being a elf, by the age of 16 he was sent to an academy for fighting. He soon learned how to control his abilities and realized how powerful he actually was

Powers: able to control and twist the light around him to blinding or even disintegrating rates, speed, and agility

Personality: somewhat quiet, mostly good matured, and slightly sarcastic

Sample RP post: Prism stood alone in the academies virtual training room, he was preparing for the mission to begin. Lights started to swirl around him at blinding rates, until images started to form. Then he found he was standing on a street corner with people bustling all around him. He just waited, waited for something to happen someone to jump out of the crowd at him, but nothing. He decided that as long as he stood there nothing was going to happen. Walking down every street corner he could find he found nothing. He started for a dark ally, and stopped abruptly, looking strait at him was the largest blood wolf he had ever seen reaching for his sword he leaped into action. Front flipping over the creature he locked himself in combat. The wolf lunged and snapped with the ferocity of a thousand fires. Blocking all of its incoming moves searching for an opening, finding a breach in the creatures defenses he lunged, right as he was about to deal a lethal blow the creature morphed into a humanoid hunched over with long hair and deadly long claws. The strange being leaped at him pinning him down, rolling over and over they tried to overcome the other in strength finding some footing Prism locked his feet into the ground and hurled the creature over his back and into a wall summoning light with all of his strength he shot a beam and zapped the creature. The science dimmed and he was standing back into the training room the master of the school walked into the room and said “well done Prism your test is complete you have surpassed everything we can teach you, you are free to go.


Sorry I haven’t rp’d in forever so there is my attempt

ACCEPTED

And about not RPing in ages, you don't need to worry about that here. We go from complete beginners to page long posts!

Ok thanks

Er.. Pris... well... I guess...
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It's not bad, but it's very, very bland...

And give me credit for drawing your freaking head!

The sample RP is nice when they are fighting, but the ending is a little, Godmod-ish? Cliche?

Especially at that last bit, with no stops or commas.
'WeldonPrismyourtestiscompletyouhavesurpassedeverythingwecanteachyou, youarfretogo.'
You only have ONE comma. I would've at least put two, or even three. But hey, at least I understand it.

Hey, wait, is KHR-style avi a fad now? Suli started a fad. I can't beleive it.

Well. Yeah. Suli made his, so I made mine, and then I know Priz in real life, so he wanted to make one too.... yeah...
*agrees with Bart on his comments*